Scarlett Moment [Mentalist FF for PIR September challenge]

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Title: Scarlett Moment
Author: MarissaAngell aka BDS
Rating: K+
Characters: Patrick Jane
Summary: A fic written for Paint It Red Monthly Challenge..
''Not today.
Today was too good of a day.
Maybe some other time...''
Disclaimer: I own only my ideas...
Prompt: '' Live Like You're Dying'' by Lenka
Spoilers: none

All of the moments you didn't notice gone in the blink of an eye
And all of the feelings you can't help feeling no matter how you try

Red.
He could see all red.
 
Drip. Drip. Drip.
Drop. Drop. Drop.
 
The steady rhythm of crimson drops.
 
Drip. Drip. Drip.
Drop. Drop. Drop.
 
Blood.
The juice of a life.
All scrattered down on the marble surface.
Like it was nothing...
 
What happened? Where did all the time go?
 
He looked up from the scarlett liquid.
Two dull, blue orbs gazed back from silvery surface.
 
Drip. Drip. Drip.
Drop. Drop. Drop.
 
Was he really that desperate? But maybe it was only an accident?
His mind grew fuzzy. Every drop wasted away did same with his life.
Why?
He didn't know either.
 
But suddenly only one thing occured.
 
It was all just a moment of weakness.
 
He quickly grabbed towel and wrapped his hand in it.
Not today.
Today was too good of a day.
Maybe some other time..
And he walked outside on the terrace to face the sunset in crimson hues...

It's all up to you to do whatever you choose
Live like you're dying and never stop trying
It's all you can do, use what's been given to you

 

Comments

[tromana.livejournal.com]

I like the repetition in this. Definitely one of your better pieces.

[marissaangell.livejournal.com]

thank you so much! :)
i'm so glad you liked it.
i'll try to keep that way in future :)

[miss-peg.livejournal.com]

This is a bit like a poem, which is nice! A few mistakes here and there, but nothing that can't be easily fixed. I like it! :)

[marissaangell.livejournal.com]

thanks! i'm glad you liked :)